Thesis - Men Should Be A Gentleman.
Supporting Idea - Tuxedo Shows Masculinity.. - a man should be professional and it shows his character and gives off the idea of his wealth.
Supporting Idea - A Man Is Well Groomed.. (clean cut, respect for himself, manly)
Supporting Idea - The Fragrance/Text Is Targeted for Men..(it's cologne not perfume, text says gentle men
not woman).
Conclusion - restate the thesis, wrap up thoughts and end with a concluding sentence.
you make good points. a gentleman is associated with class,stature and rank. someone who has conduct.
ReplyDeleteI like your thesis, and your supporting points are important and effectively ordered. But is tuxedo a professional garment or a special occasion garment? A well groomed man is one who cares about his appearance, so is he somewhat in the danger zone of being perceived as feminine? The previous point is related to the last, or the words included on the ad. Is it necessary to emphasize that the fragrance is for men? What does the phrase 'the one' suggest?
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Try to go into it a little further, like with tuxedo, what do we relate manly with that, you could use, the james bond ,that every guy wants to be the double agent in danger & gets the girl in the end
ReplyDeleteYes, a tuxedo is worn as a professional garment on a special occasion. His apperance is his personal style of being neat and having a clean cut and can be mistaken for being feminine. It is a new era, and some women like their men well groomed, rather than the caveman look.
ReplyDeleteThe one in my opinion means what men should be like.
Gina I agree with the James Bond idea. Thanks, I'm going to include that in my essay.
I'm still unclear about your distinction between professional garment and a garment worn for a special occasion. Surely there is a difference between work conference and wedding attire?
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